Listening to the rain #SOL15

15 Mar

My dad always told us his favorite poem was Fog by Carl Sandburg.I’m not sure he liked it because of what it said or because it was a short one he could remember.


The fog comes
on little cat feet.
It sits looking
over harbor and city
on silent haunches
and then moves on.
I spoke to my soon to be 84 year old mom on the phone yesterday and she told me it was foggy where they lived, and it hadn’t burned off as she had expected. I told her we were having fairly heavy rain and it seems will continue today and into tomorrow. Here is the forecast:
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It rained steadily all night and I had the window open because I like to listen to the sound of rain at night. It brings back a lot of memories. Good ones mostly. So, I thought I would try my hand at creating a Carl Sandburg-like poem about the rain.
The rain comes
on centipede feet.
It runs swiftly
over rooftop and eaves
flowing down drainpipes
and then moves on.

7 Responses to “Listening to the rain #SOL15”

  1. litcoach64 March 15, 2015 at 7:13 am #

    I loved your poem! I could hear the rain “on centipede feet”. Great imagery!

  2. writekimwrite March 15, 2015 at 7:17 am #

    It is very quite here early Sunday morning so I could almost hear your steady rain. I have always liked the Sandburg poem, too. It was a good mentor text for you to create your rain poem.

  3. tomockthekillingbird March 15, 2015 at 7:25 am #

    I always love a poet inspired poem. Well done. Sufjan Steven’s has a great song where at the end he sings about Carl Sandburg’s ghost appearing to him in a dream. If I can get you to listen to his “Come On Feel The Illinoise Song!” from beginning to end my SOL dreams will come true.

  4. arjeha March 15, 2015 at 8:02 am #

    Love your take on the poem. I’ve always like the description of fog coming in on little cat feet, then I think of the cat thumps around here and that blows the image for me. 🙂

  5. elsie March 15, 2015 at 5:07 pm #

    That is an awesome write of a poem based on Fog! I guess having the rain pattering on your roof helped. 🙂

  6. beachhousefarmhouse March 16, 2015 at 3:30 am #

    What a gorgeous little poem. I too love the rain, it is so relaxing. Beautiful slice. 🙂

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